It's time Paris its time where on now i said excitedly making my way onto the long flume ride. Plonk we were on the boat all ready for a adventure yay we said. We first went up the tunnel making our way to a black place where we could not see. Then the next minute splash down ahhh. We were both not expecting that. Then as the log was going around the corner we herd a freaky high pitch music sound. As soon as we past the corner there it was creepy music and plastic frogs, elfs and all sorts of other things. Then suddenly we stopped then boom! down we went, it felt like i had lost my stomach while going down. Sadly after that the ride had finished Paris and i hoped off wanting to do it again.
I think that you did really well with onamatopoeia and similes great job.
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I enjoyed reliving the moments we had in you blog!!!! :-) (-:
By Paris BFLASS
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